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Scary. It has a good amount of points, but these points need to have more of his perspective on the issue, because it seems that his essay is just relaying information to me. Sometimes there are some connections such to executions and football… they do not quite seem to fit logically together…

18th November 2010

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Review of Jonathon’s Essay

Honestly, it is a great paper already! The only thing that I think that the paper needs is better transitions in between paragraphs. I was really impressed on how it subtly summarized and analyzed the Hitt essay.

18th November 2010

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Review of Taylor’s Essay

Taylor’s essay is more of an outline, but it is easy to see that she has good points that are in the process of being expanded. It seems that she is going to put a lot of focus on the loss of formality of the wedding ceremony and how weddings are more of a celebration than a ceremony.

18th November 2010

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Review of Grant’s Essay

Grant is in the process of writing a great paper. He just needs to put more of his perspectives on the issue of weddings in American culture. It is very smoothly written, but with more of his input will really give the essay momentum and some more drive for the reader to continue on.

18th November 2010

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Review of Kevin’s Essay

Kevin is a great writer. He puts out quite a lot of interesting and imposing topics. Not only are his topics great, but they are also put together well. He is very clear when explaining his points, but sometimes too clear in such a way that to expand on a point, he tends to stray off the main topic. This doesn’t happen often, but it would be better if a paper stayed on topic all throughout. After some quick and easy fixes, Kevin will have written a stellar paper!